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感受下雅思中国官网上对于写作task1部分的介绍

在作文一中,题目中会给出一些视觉性的信息,如一个或多个互相关联的图表、图解或表格,考生需对这些信息或数据进行描述。题目也可以是一个机械图、装置图、或流程图,考生需对其运作方法进行解释。

作文一的内容是学术性的,因此考生应该运用学术写作的文体。文章字数不能少于150字,建议考生用20分钟完成

作文一考察的是考生在图表或表格中选择最重要和最相关的信息(一些次要的信息则可忽略)、并对这些信息进行清晰描述的能力,考官将对考生组织这些信息的能力以及语言使用的准确性进行评分。

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作文一是如何进行评分的?

  • 是否完成了写作要求:考生能否有效地找到信息中关键的内容并对之进行描述和写作;
  • 连贯性和结构层次:考生能否将信息和要点进行组织,信息和要点之间的联系是否清晰;
  • 词汇来源:考生使用的词汇是否广泛、准确、且适合这一部分写作的要求;
  • 语法的多样性和准确性:考生使用的语法结构是否多样、准确、且适合这一部分写作的要求。

有什么需注意的方面?

  • 考生需将作文写在答卷上;
  • 考生应保证字数至少达到150字,否则将会被扣分。字数多于150字不会被扣分,但考生应注意如果在作文一花费太长时间,则作文二的用时将会减少。
  • 文章内容如果偏题或者跑题将被扣分;
  • 任何抄袭(如抄袭其他来源的内容)的作文将被重扣;
  • 文章如果不完整、内容相互没有关联将被扣分(如在任何部分使用点句或笔记形式)。

写作例文及考官点评

请注意,在具体改卷过程中,会有很多因素影响考生的写作分数,以下作文示例仅为参考,请勿当做唯一标准。

5分范例

Examiner comment:

Band 5

The length of the answer is just acceptable. There is a good attempt to describe the overall trends but the content would have been greatly improved if the candidate had included some reference to the figures given on the graph. Without these, the reader is lacking some important information. The answer is quite difficult to follow and there are some punctuation errors that cause confusion.

The structures are fairly simple and efforts to produce more complex sentences are not successful.

6分范例

Examiner comment:

Band 6

The candidate has made a good attempt to describe the graphs looking at global trends and more detailed figures. There is, however, some information missing and the information is inaccurate in minor areas.

The answer flows quite smoothly although connectives are overused or inappropriate, and some of the points do not link up well. The grammatical accuracy is quite good and the language used to describe the trends is well­ handled.

However, there are problems with expression and the appropriate choice of words and whilst there is good structural control, the complexity and variation in the sentences are limited.

6分范例

Examiner comment:

Band 6

The answer has an appropriate introduction which the candidate has attempted to express in his/her own words. There is good coverage of the data and a brief reference to contrasting trends.

The answer can be followed although it is rather repetitive and cohesive devices are overused. In order to gain a higher mark for content, the candidate would be expected to select the salient features of the graph and comment primarily on these. Sentences are long but lack complexity.

There are some errors in tense, verb form and spelling which interfere slightly with the flow of the answer.

7分范例

Examiner comment:

Band 7

The answer deals well with both the individual media trends and the overall comparison of these trends. The opening could be more fully developed with the inclusion of information relating to the groups studied and the period of time during which the study took place.

There is a good variety of cohesive devices and the message can be followed quite easily although the expression is sometimes a little clumsy.

Structures are complex and vocabulary is varied but there are errors in word forms, tense and voice though these do not impede communication.

指南君说:

大家可以根据给到的考官建议,反思自己平时写作文的过程中有没有出现类似的问题。雅思作文想要拿高分,一定离不开平时的积累和练习,加油!

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