雅思大作文真题外教原创范文:富裕国家额外的经济增长

上题:

Some experts suppose that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens happier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

审题:

  • Type: Opinion 观点类大作文 (for the most part, agree)
  • Body 1: financial wealth allows for freedom of choice
  • Body 2: excessive choices and convenience lead to obesity, and narcissism, etc.

- Model Answer 范文 & 范文朗读 -

9.18大陆雅思大作文真题回忆 | 富裕国家额外的经济增长能让国民更幸福吗

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- Essay Analysis 范文解析 -

- (1) Introduction -

Paraphrasing from the Statement/Question 题目改写:

  • Some experts = academics
  • suppose = It has often been cited by
  • a country is already rich = a certain threshold of wealth is met within a nation
  • additional increases = further growth
  • economic wealth = national prosperity
  • make its citizens happier = increase the general level of contentment

Standard Phrase for the “Opinion” type essay 观点类大作文通用句式

  • It has often been cited that…
  • For the most part, I agree with this (assumption) for the following reasons.

Words showing Cohesion (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇短语:

  • , that when
  • is met within
  • this

Vocabulary 高分地道词汇短语:

  • a certain threshold of ……的一个临界点
  • prosperity 繁荣昌盛
  • contentment 满足
  • assumption 假想;设想;假设

- (2) Body 1 -

Aspects that must be referred to:

  • additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens happier (agree)

Standard IELTS essay phrase 通用句式:

  • One of the main reasons…is that

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇短语:

  • equates to 等于
  • higher rates of 高利率
  • monetary gain 金钱收益
  • a greater range of 更广的
  • at an individual level 个人层次
  • does not always stand at 不总是停留在
  • macro (level) 宏观(层面)
  • some of the….(also to have) some of the
  • normally associated with 通常与……相关
  • depression 沮丧;抑郁;消沉
  • suicide 自杀
  • obesity 肥胖
  • narcissism 自恋
  • general malaise 周身不适
  • evident 明显的
  • decades 数载

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇短语:

  • is that
  • bring about
  • While this
  • , it
  • , as some of
  • Also
  • These
  • , and
  • such as
  • , countries where

- (3) Body 2 -

Aspects that must be referred to:

  • The part I disagree with (from a ‘personal increase in wealth’ point of view) but must remain focused on a country (nation, society, overall economy). This shows a ‘dichotomy’ or ‘contrast’.

 

Standard IELTS essay phrase 通用句式:

  • Despite this…
  • there is no doubt that

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇短语:

  • upward trend of 上升趋势
  • despondency 丧气;失望
  • affluence 富裕
  • a greater plethora of 更多的
  • living environment 生活环境
  • consumer choices 消费选择
  • sources of pleasure 快乐源泉
  • evidence seems to support 普遍认为
  • the notion that ……的观念
  • uptick 上升;上涨
  • the populace 大众;平民
  • slip into 进入;陷入
  • the lack of (purpose) 缺乏目标
  • materialism 物质主义
  • an overabundance of 过量的;过多的;过于丰富的

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇短语:

  • Despite this…
  • Such
  • there
  • not just …, but also
  • , affecting
  • such as
  • Nevertheless
  • that despite
  • , even when this
  • still
  • brought on by
  • on the one hand, … on the other

- (4) Conclusion -

Standard IELTS essay phrase 通用句式:

  • In conclusion, I believe that

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇短语:

  • personal financial wealth 个人经济财富
  • life contentment 生活的满足感
  • (the same) cannot be said (for)
  • void of 缺乏
  • a central guiding principle 某种导向;某种指导原则
  • exacerbated by 加剧;恶化
  • the array of 各种各样的
  • victims of ……的受害者
  • dissatisfaction 不满足

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语:

  • although
  • , the same (cannot be said for)
  • , generally,
  • , for which
  • , and hence,
  • become

 

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