雅思大作文真题外教原创高分范文:无人驾驶汽车

上题:

It will be better to have wide use of driverless cars for both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

题目分析:

TypeOpinion (partially agree)

  • Body 1: benefits for society include less traffic congestion due to accidents and poor driving
  • Body 2: however, drawbacks are that it takes away from the enjoyment of driving and can infringe upon personal privacy

- Model Answer 高分范文 & 范文朗读 -

9月4日雅思大作文真题 | 外教高分范文 解析 朗读:无人驾驶汽车

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-- Essay Analysis 范文解析 --

-- (1) Introduction --

Paraphrasing from the Statement/Question:

  • be better to = is beneficial
  • wide use = wide-spread adoption of
  • cars = vehicles
  • individuals = citizens
  • society = the general society at large

Standard Phrase for the “Opinion” type essay:

  • There is a school of thought that suggests…
  • I only partially agree with this opinion,

Words showing Cohesion (C&C):

  • only
  • , as there
  • , and
  • that it
  • presently

Vocabulary:

  • the wide-spread adoption of ……的广泛使用
  • (society) at large 整个 (社会);广大社会
  • privacy concerns 隐私顾虑
  • inhibit 抑制;阻碍
  • the joy ___ receive from 从……中得到的乐趣

-- (2) Body 1 --

Standard IELTS essay phrase:

  • One of the main benefits…is that…

Vocabulary and Collocations:

  • traffic congestion 交通阻塞
  • the concept of ……的概念
  • automobiles 车辆
  • to successfully operate 成功操作/运转
  • on-board navigation system 车载导航系统
  • connected to a centralized network of 连接到集中式网络
  • information nodes 信息节点
  • relay (information) 发送 (信息);传递(信息)
  • information processed 处理后的信息
  • data from sensors and cameras 来自传感器和摄像机的信息
  • built into 内置
  • prevent accidents 避免事故
  • traffic backlogs 交通堵塞
  • metropolitan 大都市
  • ease of mind 心情舒畅
  • commuting 通勤

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C)

  • they
  • likely
  • , especially
  • In order for
  • , the
  • this
  • also includes
  • Altogether,
  • , and the resultant
  • This can only enhance
  • also
  • while
  • , as

-- (3) Body 2 --

Standard IELTS essay phrase:

  • It is, however, precisely this…

Vocabulary and Collocations:

  • interconnectedness between ……之间的互联
  • a centralized traffic information hub 中心化的交通信息中心
  • stems from 来源于;源自
  • the fact that ……的事实
  • , and by proxy, 由此得出;相当于
  • Anxious 焦虑
  • governmental body 管理机构
  • tracking their every move 追踪一切行踪
  • transforming society 社会变革
  • the age-old joy of (idiomatic expression) 长久以来的乐趣
  • suppressed 压抑;被压制
  • relegated (condemned) to the dustbin of history (idiomatic expression) 淡出历史舞台

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C)

  • It
  • however
  • precisely
  • this
  • with regard to
  • , and by proxy,
  • While many may feel this
  • , there
  • those that would feel
  • Perhaps the most…however,
  • that by
  • , and

-- (4) Conclusion --

Standard IELTS essay phrase:

  • In conclusion,
  • I believe

Vocabulary and Collocations:

  • the mass adoption of ……的大规模应用
  • traffic jams 交通阻塞
  • the appearance of ……的出现
  • the inevitable extinction of ……不可避免的消失
  • one of life’s little pleasures (idiomatic expression) 生活中的小乐趣
  • slightly unnerving 让人不安
  • ventures 冒险

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C):

  • greatly
  • , as it
  • lead to
  • of both
  • ; despite this though,
  • as
  • who
  • , and for many with the population that also
  • the same
  • , not to mention that it
  • , no matter where one

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